I have been learning how to put detail into my piece of writing I use high level words and describing words for my story and similes which help me in my story and other things. I need to learn not to put more than two of the same words in one sentence.

              Race day

On Monday I was practicing my underwater race so I can get better than Mata and Joseph because they're way better than me.I can't even swim down and grab the rock.They are like a shark that can walk underwater and pick up huge rocks.I am like a  dog that can't last 10 seconds underwater. 2 weeks later I finally grabbed that rock it took me ages to get that rock. Then Mata and Joseph came they took my rock right when I got all energetic but then I grabbed the rock threw it away and glided like a bird in the air towards the rock. When I picked it up I started running with a little bit of oxygen left and I ran away like an underwater crab fleeing across the ocean. Then finally I got away then started floating up I just made without with no oxygen then I caught my breath and had to swim 1 kilometer home but I caught a ride back with Mata and Joseph.